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If it changed to the Everything Will Kill You So Choose Something Fun ATV Vintage Retro Shirt. That the reader could not know would be missing. What feeling do you want to impart, which is not there? Add these and no more. Sounds like an interesting story. Try posting it with formatting and I might be able to read it through. I admire you for posting this and asking for input. Just don’t stop. You are a writer – it just gets better, the more you work on it the more joy it will give you. Never perfect, but it does condense into something you want to say, with work. Perfect it for yourself and you will create a unique niche.
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